Revised: If you make a hole while freeing a stuck vehicle, you must fill the hole before you drive away.
If you make a hole while freeing a stuck vehicle, fill it before you leave.
having to provide all your contact information when buying something with a credit card online.
Revised: having to enter all your contact information when buying something with a credit card online.
In a survey conducted by the Pew Research Center, they report that roughly 72% of the people surveyed worry about a future where robots can do human jobs, and most would not use automation technologies if given the chance
Revised: According to the Pew Research Center, roughly 72% of those surveyed worry that robots will replace people in the workforce and most would resist automation if they can.
While not yet coined as a term until later by Alice Walker in 1982, its actions were practiced by slave owners who allowed lighter skinned slaves to be housemaids or on house duty labor, and keeping the 'darker' black people in the fields (Bridges).
Revised: Alice Walker coined the term colorism in 1982 to refer to the pre-civil war era practice of employing light-skinned slaves indoors and dark-skinned slaves doors.
A child needs to grow up in an environment to be able to differentiate right from wrong, but at a young age that knowledge can be lost to them.
Revised: Children need to be taught right from wrong, but the world they grow up in might not teach them. (?)
An analysis of main effect and interaction was conducted.
Revised: The drug's main and secondary effects were analyzed.
American women should be encouraged to increase the delay in having children
Revised: Americans should delay having children (?)
Health care is of concern to all of us.
Revised: Health care concerns us all.
The problem is that most Americans are not educated consumers
Revised: Americans are uneducated consumers, for the most part.
The committee has every expectation that it will reach a decision for the purpose of reaching a conclusion about that issue before the deadline.
Revised: The committee plans to decide before the deadline.
This problem is created by the inability for students to have a forum where they can search for and find cheaper and up to date textbooks.
Revised: Students need a place to buy textbooks for less.
When discussing the North Korea regime there is no question that the government is volatile and a threat to its people
Revised: The volatile North Korea regime threatens its people.
In the dialogue between Socrates and Gorgias, respect for one another is always there.
Revised: Plato demonstrates that Socrates and Gorgias respected each other.
I'm coming from a place of curiosity about the reasons people thru-hike in general, and what needs or exigencies long trails such as the PCT may be meeting.
Revised: I wonder what motivates people to thru-hike in general and if those hiking the Pacific Coast Trail are perhaps differently motivated.
Advancements in computerization have been ever evolving since the early 1970's, eliminating the need for as many human workers.
Revised: Computerization has been reducing the need for workers since the 1970's.
It also can't be overstated the precision of this weaponry,
Revised: These weapons are precise.
The group's failure was the result of the way the chairman decided to submit his resignation.
Revised: The group failed because the chairman resigned the way he did.
The major difference of cosmopolitanism from other theories is that it searches for ethical standard, universal equality and fraternity, and world peace.
Revised: Cosmopolitanism significantly differs from other theories in that it searches for ethical standards, universal equality and fraternity, and world peace.